It has been noted that many people who had a big impact on the world gave themselves completely to their work and did not bother with the idea of “work-life balance”. To what extent should people try to have a good work-life balance? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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lives and these kind of people think that trying to have a balance between work and life tends people to be far from their essential goals. I completely agree that people who wants to be eminent and impact all over the world he should focus on work.
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, during the exams, I tried to avoid myself from life and studied my exams and I got good points.
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good work-life balance mostly are not successful, because they can easily distract and lose their concentration to their works and addict to bad treaties.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Well-being
  • Productivity
  • Fulfilling
  • Time management
  • Prioritize
  • Burnout
  • Boundaries
  • Dedication
  • Personal fulfillment
  • Efficiency
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