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Some people think that spending a lot on holding wedding parties, birthday parties is just a waste of money. Others, however, think that it is necessary for society and individuals. Discuss both views and opinions.

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Celebrations are indeed an indispensable part of our life. While some people prefer splurging
money
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 on organising their events, others favour the flip side of it. We will be dealing with both the views in the succeeding paragraphs as well as I will pose my opinion on
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To begin
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 with, there is a large section of people who likes to spend
humongous amount
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the humongous amount
a humongous amount
 of wealth on their special occasions. To elucidate, the societal pressure on people makes it obligatory for them to invest in colossal amounts on their weddings and functions. For maintaining their grandeur, they end up having lavish weddings.
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, there are some people who consider their functions as
once
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a once
 in a lifetime opportunity. By spending extravagantly they try to make their events memorable and undying. To exemplify, the Indian wedding industry is the
second
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 largest in the world with a total value of over rupees 5000 crores.
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, there are some people with conflicting views. To expound, they think that pretentious and pompous show of their wealth is useless. By squandering their
money
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, they are
devoiding
separate into parts or portions
dividing
defending
devoting
 many people of the basic amenities. According to them, the grand celebration leads to food wastage which many people in the world are devoid of. To illustrate, according to a survey, in big fat Indian weddings about 30% of food is wasted.
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, some people take loans to organise their functions which makes them fall into debt trap. In my opinion,
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 the weddings are an auspicious
event but
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event, but
 unmindful spendings should be avoided. To clarify, those with generous
money
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 can arrange an intimate wedding and donate the rest to meet the requirements of the disadvantaged groups. Alternatively, the
money
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 can be invested in a proper manner which will grow
multifolds
Many times doubled; manifold; numerous
multifold
 and address the future demands of the family. To culminate, spending
money
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 on functions is subjective. People should spend
money
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 according to the
potential but
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potential, but
superfluous use
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the superfluous use
 of wealth should be avoided. The need of the hour is to cut down the expenses in order to hoard
money
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 for the future.
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