It has been noted that many people who had a big impact on the world gave themselves completely to their work and did not bother with the idea of “work-life balance”. To what extent should people try to have a good work-life balance?

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As we know capitalism is dominant lots of world countries nowadays. According to capitalism, the one who works hard will gain a lot.
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people who had a big impact on the world gave themselves completely to their job and did not bother with the idea of “
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-life balance. I disagree with these people and think that people should balance
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-life. In my opinion, each person has one life and its average is 80 years. If he doesn'
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want to waste his years, they have two main options.
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and foremost, the person has to find his favourite job in which he works with love and doesn'
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know how
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past.
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, when people looking for a career they should not make an impulsive decision, and try to find
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office which he loves no matter how many hours he will
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case, if he doesn'
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have any
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for other social activities and entertainment, his performance will suffice for his happiness.
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, If people don'
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find an accurate
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for them and just struggle for money, they should make a special activity for themselves after
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. In
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they are bored during
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, the activity which they will do after the
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, make hours of
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to endure.
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, if their
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is unendurable, they should create a bond among some of their colleagues, and make their job a bit more bearable.
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what I want, but I have entertaining and intelligent co-workers so I spent my
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better. In conclusion, people should not waste their
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and try to find things which entertain and make more meaningful their
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everlastingly.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Well-being
  • Productivity
  • Fulfilling
  • Time management
  • Prioritize
  • Burnout
  • Boundaries
  • Dedication
  • Personal fulfillment
  • Efficiency
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