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You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter, • describe the situation • explain your problems and why it is difficult to work • say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

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Dear Sir/
Madams
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, I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with my
roommate
 in the Rezvan accommodation. I am a student at IMT University and I am living in
room
 number 2,
second
 floor the Rezvan accommodation. The
room
 is shared between me and some other
student
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students
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. Unfortunately, she is not a good
roommate
 and I have some
problem
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problems
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 with her. I am a very clean girl. These days I need
pace
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a pace
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 and
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quiet
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quit
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quiet
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 environment to study.
However
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 with my
roommate
condition
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 I cannot study. She is too messy, make a lot of noise. And
also
, most of the time she brings her friend to our
room
 and
wake
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 up until
the
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midnight. During the time they are laughing, dancing. You can imagine how unhappy I was when I discover she uses my private
stuffs
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. I cannot stay in
this
room
 with my
roommate
any more
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. I cannot study, I do not have any privacy. I hope you can settle down
this
 matter by changing my
room
. I understand how is difficult to find a new
room
at
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middle
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the middle
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 of
semester
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the semester
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. I need a private
room
,
size
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the size
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 of
room
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the room
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it
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does not matter, I just need a bed and a table. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Mari.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accommodation officer
  • roommate
  • share a room
  • living arrangement
  • difficult to work
  • noise levels
  • study environment
  • privacy concerns
  • alternative accommodation
  • single room
  • academic performance
  • well-being
  • respectfully request
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