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The best way to resolve the international environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#cost #fuel
It is sometimes argued that
higher cost
Suggestion
the higher cost
 of fossil
fuel
 is the best way to alleviate the international environmental problems. While I agree that the rise in the
fuel
 price could solve the problems partially, I would argue there are
more better
Suggestion
better
 solutions to tackle the issues. The increase of
fuel
 cost has some beneficial influences on the environmental issues. When it comes to transportation, because of the high expense of petrol, individuals would change their journey habits, which means that
instead
 of using private vehicles, they turn to commute by public ones, cutting down on the quantity of detrimental emissions released from vehicles and
thus
 reducing air pollution.
Furthermore
, raising
fuel
 price puts pressure on factories consuming fossil energy, which make them seek for other low-cost powers
such
 as alternative energy sources to to replace.
This
 results in the decrease of the large amount of greenhouse gases discharged from the burning of fossil fuels, decelerating the process of global warming.
However
, despite of the aforementioned benefits of
higher price
Suggestion
the higher price
higher prices
 of
fuel
, I would argue that governments should take more effective measures to deal with the global environmental problems. The development of renewable energy which is environmentally friendly
such
 as wind, solar and
hydro-electric
of or relating to or used in the production of electricity by waterpower
hydroelectric
 power should be invested forcefully in order to reduce the dependence on fossil fuels which are in short supply in the future.
In addition
, governments should
also
 allocate resources to expand the area of
forests including
Accept comma addition
forests, including
 afforestation and conservation of vegetative cover since flora not only absorbs carbon dioxide and other pollutants which cause the increase of the earth’s average temperature but
also
 prevent
desertification
 and redress the ecological system. In conclusion,
although
 the rise of
fuel
 cost would have some positive impacts, there are more potential solutions to mitigate the global environmental issues.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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