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are social network good or bad, give your opinion?

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Human beings are social creatures. Everyone wants to interact and express their ideas and feelings to others. I think that the existence of social networking sites has had a huge impact on us. Those apps have affected the way we connect with people around us. It allows us to talk with people we have never known or met. In
this
 essay, I will clarify my standpoint and review the pros and cons of those sites.
Firstly
, The pros: -Social apps are an easy way to connect with others. You can follow people that you like, see their
status and
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status, and
 keep yourself updated without having to meet them in person or call them. -Social apps are a great platform to start a
business
 or make your existing
business
 grow.
it
Suggestion
It
 allows sellers to promote their product easily and their products can be seen by a wild population. Not to mention the
business
 can have an international dimension with the help of those apps
instead
 of being locally limited.
For instance
, my uncle is a
boots
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boot
 designer and he started a company a few years ago. His
business
 would have never been successful without
facebook
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Facebook
 promoting his products. He would design an extraordinary boot and
then
 make a wonderful advertisement video describing its features.
Then
 he would upload the advertisement video to
facebook
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Facebook
 and
facebook
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Facebook
 promotes it.
a
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We
nd the sales we have to admit that those apps have made our life easier
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