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Should governments or teachers, the responsible for what is to be taught in schools? Give reasons for your answer.

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It is the most debatable question that which one is deciding for what is to be taught in schools whether
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 or teachers. So, some people believe that the teachers have onus to decide what is being taught in the schools, whereas the others argue that the
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 decision. I totally agree with the
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 opinion. It has more pros outweigh cons.
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 and foremost, teachers are the designers of the future generation. They spend more time with the students after their parents. So, teachers know their pupils better than the
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, they know the strengths and weaknesses of their students well enough because of these they can decide which subjects are really helpful for students.
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 to the above, they not only teach school subjects, but
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 they organize extra curricular activities for them, owing to
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 they can excel in sports as well. They can guide their pupils like their children.
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, teachers can get an idea whether students are learning and retaining the delivered material by taking exams. If students make mistakes,
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 they will punish hardly because of these students would not make that mistake again.
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, the
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 knows what is the recent market requirements, due to
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 it can design subjects that would help needs of market and economic growth.
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, it can introduce subjects according to the future requirements of country's professional jobs.
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, many organizations work under
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 can assess the needs of these businesses. So, governments can introduce the required subjects in schools. To conclude, teachers have more right to decide what is to be taught in schools because they have enough knowledge about their students. They can design subjects and methods related to the capabilities of their students.
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