Some people dislike changes in their society and in their own lives, and want things to stay the same. Why do some people want things to stay the same? Why should change be regarded as something positive?
Currently, the world is changing rapidly. Some
people
dislike these changes
because of their inconvenience. Others welcome and enjoy these transitions. This
essay will discuss both perspectives in detail.
Firstly
, the younger generation is embracing innovation. These people
insist changing of the world, especially the development of technologies
, make their lives significantly easier. For example
, they can go to the destinations where they have not been visited. Furthermore
, they do not have to bring their wallets because they can purchase goods and services without paper money through their smart devices. Since they are completely adapted to the diverse technologies
and the latest knowledge, they cannot imagine the past time when they were not able to use these advantages.
On the other hand
, a lot of individuals, commonly the older generation, are suffering from these changes
. For them, even using a smartphone is also
difficult. However
, new technologies
are inventing and injecting their lives rapidly. For example
, many stores installed kiosks. These new devices are hard to handle sometimes even for the younger generation. However
, they immediately solve problems because they have some background knowledge similar to kiosks. Unlike, younger people
, elder people
are not able to handle these obstacles yet. As a result
, they are afraid of the markets that are not operating with human employees.
In conclusion, the changes
in lifestyles due to
the development of technologies
have a beneficial influence on individuals’ lives. However
, some people
have not adapted and suffered from these changes
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While the essay addresses the prompt and provides a balanced discussion about both perspectives, it would benefit from clearer topic sentences and slightly more developed examples.
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