Tourism is encouraged in many countries. Does tourism bring more advantages or disadvantages to a country.

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Many people hold the view that in many states of the

world people

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world, people

are sustained to

travel

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because

this

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brings a

lot

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of advantages for that state and I can say that I found disadvantages too

Accept space

even if there are a few

Accept space

we can deny that do not exist. Nowadays, because of the

develpment

act of improving by expanding or enlarging or refining

development

developments

of the

techology

the practical application of science to commerce or industry

technology

, people

find

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are finding

lot

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of nice places to visit from around the world.The way to

travel

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is more

facil

of or concerning the face

facial

feasible

fail

and

this

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encourage

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encourages

people.

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the same time

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there are a

lot

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of offers at very good prices.

Firstly

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tourism

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brings a

lot

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of benefits to humans because is a way to

relaxe

become less tense, rest, or take one's ease

relax

Accept space

to escape from

daily routine

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the daily routine

and to learn about

new culture

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new cultures

a new culture

from other countries.Another advantage is that people spend money in that country and

this

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have

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has

a positive impact

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the economy.

Tourism

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can create new jobs in poor countries.

For example

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, in Fillipine

tourism

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principal way

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the principal way

of survival and local

people

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peoples'

peoples

lives with money that

are earned

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is earned

from

tourism

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Gouvernments

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Government

should encourage people to

travel

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with travelling

programms

a series of steps to be carried out or goals to be accomplished

programs

programmes

, with money and subventions.

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Furthermore young people

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Furthermore, young people

and children should learn since they are in schools about how to

travel

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and to learn about new cultures.

On the other hand

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tourism

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leads to an overpopulation in places that should

have the quality of being; (copula, used with an adjective or a predicate noun)

preserved.Many countries lose their culture and it is possible that some culture may

dissapear

get lost, as without warning or explanation

disappear

few years

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a few years

This

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continuous migration of people can damage to the environment, because the necessity of new hotels is in increasing and due to

this

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the pollution is high too.Another disadvantage can be the illegal immigrations or illegal foods and services trading. Taking

eveything

all things

everything

into

consideration I

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consideration, I

belive

accept as true; take to be true

believe

that advantages overweight the disadvantages and

tourism

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should be

promovated

contribute to the progress or growth of

promoted

and encouraged and I hope that

tourism

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will become more and more sustained by every country.

Tourism

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can help in the

progres

gradual improvement or growth or development

progress

of a nation and its citizens.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

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Relevant & specific examples

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311 words

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Tourism is encouraged in many countries. Does tourism bring more advantages or disadvantages to a country.

Your opinion

In many countries, young people move to cities leaving their homes in rural areas for work or study. What do you think are the reasons for it? Do you think advantages for moving to cities outweigh disadvantages?

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Many students choose to take a gap year before starting university, to travel or gain work experience. Do you think this is a good idea or a waste of time? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience Write at least 250 words.

Exposure to international media, such as films, TV and magazines, has an impact on the local culture. What do you think of these impacts? Do you think that the advantages of these impacts outweigh the disadvantages?

Write a letter to the shop or company which supplied the equipment. In your letter, describe the problem with the equipment explain how this problem is affecting your work say what you want the shop or company to do