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Marketing and promotion is a key to successful business? To what extent do you agree?

#promotion #business
In
this
 modern trend, entrepreneurs believe that promoting their products are the best way to get success. So, companies from the lower scale to affluent companies are spending a lot of money in advertising. I do not
completely
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complete
 accord with
this
 point because
quality
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the quality
 and purity products would
popular
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popularly
 automatically. To embark on, on the
one
 side of the coin, the mesmerizing advertisements are attracting
vast amount
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the vast amount
 of customers to the shops.
Besides
, these are giving awareness for the people who don’t have much knowledge about the products and its uses.
Therefore people
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Therefore, people
 are more concerned about the brands and buying them even they are expensive. Which is increasing the growth of large scale business and they are
benefitted
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benefitting
benefiting
.
For instance
,
nike
(Greek mythology) winged goddess of victory; identified with Roman Victoria
Nike
, puma,
rolex
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Rolex
roles
are
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is
one
 of the most popular products in the world and we could see their promotion everyday
in
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on
 our televisions On the other flip side of the coin,
few brands
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a few brands
 are not required any
promotion but
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promotion, but
 still they would more popular with their quality and cost.
For instance
,
lamborgini
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Lamborgini
 car is
one
 most famous and majority of the people’s dream
car
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car, although
although
,
this
 car doesn’t advertise anything
in
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on
 the television. If a product or company has to be successful, it should be capable of making best quality and unique masterpiece for the world which automatically brings huge publicity all over the world. In conclusion, marketing is
one
 of the best and easiest ways to bring success for the
company but
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company, but
 without any advertisements
also
 we can get success as well.
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