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Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and that this money could be better spent elsewhere. To what extent do you agree with this view point ?

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There's a question sometimes goes in mind does pleasure depend On individuals or other factors
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 we want to ask ourselves what pleasure is.
joy
the emotion of great happiness
Joy
 is that feeling when you feel content and be satisfied with your life
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When you have all your needs and achieve your dreams and desires. Some people think that peace of mind depends on individuals.
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, when you eat your delicious, favourite meal or when you have a good time playing your favourite sport. Some find prosperity in travelling to someplace. One of my friends always tells me that he finds delight when he spends a lot of time playing computer games. My grandpa once tells me that happiness can be found in forgiveness and giving.
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, some people say that well-being not only depends on individuals, but
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 on other factors like the environment around us. When my child birthday comes, he feels so happy because of the presents I bring him. Some people like to stay where they can enjoy the calmness and see the beauty of nature They find their happiness in these places. When
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 They told me that money is the main source of peace of mind
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 Others find happiness in making new friends and have good relations with their community. In my opinion, I think
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 am the only person who can make the necessary changes to live a happy and fulfilled life.
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