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one of the best ways to solve Environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel. to what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Global warming is a critical issue among the world. Many research ongoing to solve
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, some people in general deem that exceeding
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 of petrol may give wide contribution to manage air pollution.
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, I totally not in favour of
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, Maximize the price of gas may reduce the growth of developing countries.
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 as, they have to spend a large
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 of money to export oil from other country's.
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, they cannot make better improvement in their health, education system for their citizens.
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,
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 may directly effect on small business, Which are totally depends on transportation.
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, minor organization should be shut down, Which ultimately decline the economy of the nation.
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, India is developing country and a report generated by "Times of India" shows that 60% of business is based on import and export system.
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, exceeding the
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 of fuel may reduce the use of private vehicle in middle class families.
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, people are in middle level may use public transport
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 of private transportation.
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, authorities have to increase the facilities as well as the availability of more public transportation.
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, Increase the value of crude oil may reduce the usage of personal cars
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 it may reduce the percentage air pollution.
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, People may prefer more public transport,
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, the government get more money from that. In conclusion, I reiterate that growing the
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 of gas may helpful for controlling the air pollution, But it may directly affect the economy of underdeveloped countries.
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