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Some people believe that capital punishment should not be used. Others, however, argue that it should be allowed for the most serious crimes. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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A section of the populace opines that
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death sentence
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a death sentence
the death sentence
 for
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crime
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a crime
the crime
crimes
 is not justifiable and should be discarded from the law. Whereas, few contend that, capital punishment should be integrated in
judicial system
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the judicial system
. Advocates of
belief
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the belief
 that
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death penalty
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the death penalty
 should not be executed, argue that
crime
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 should be terminated
instead
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 of criminals. Everyone deserves a
second
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 chance to overcome their mistakes and has a right to live peacefully. There are several organizations, who not only make an effort to save punishment of criminals, but
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 groom their personality in the
jailhouse
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Jailhouse
 by various social activities
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 as morning prayers, furniture making and spiritual sessions.
On the contrary
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, capital punishment should be made compulsory for heinous crimes to
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 an example for everyone to discourage them to even think of attempting
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 monstrosity.
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, the
crime
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 rate will be reduced or might
possible
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possibly
 will be vanished in
near future
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the near future
.
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, many Middle East countries are enormously stringent in
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 regard and success of
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 strategy can be seen by their less criminal records.
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, justice to the victims and their family can only be given by
death
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 penalty of rapist and murderers. It is horrifying to imagine that
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 lawbreakers are breathing air because of leniency in laws.
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, Delhi rape case accuses were taking advantages of
loop holes
an ambiguity (especially one in the text of a law or contract) that makes it possible to evade a difficulty or obligation
loopholes
 in
Indian judiciary system
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the Indian judiciary system
 and
victim’s family
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the victim’s family
 was calling for their hanging. Despite of
creaky legal system
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the creaky legal system
a creaky legal system
,
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death sentence
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the death sentence
 has to enforce for justice. Even though, it took 8 years to execute it. To conclude, according to me, rigorous
death
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 penalty law should be implemented to affright citizens to commit severe
crime
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 and to provide justice to the victims.

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