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In some time countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

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Nowadays, the majority of teenagers decide to leave their country to work or travel for a long period after finishing high school and before starting university. In my opinion, I believe that a
year
 away from home is important to grow up. In
this
 essay, I will discuss about the advantages and disadvantages for students who decide to do
this
.
First
 and foremost, in the
last
 decades, young people prefer to take a gap
year
 in order to understand what they want to do in their future. In my own experience, I took a gap
year
 after high school and I left my country and I went to California for three months in order to learn
english
an Indo-European language belonging to the West Germanic branch; the official language of Britain and the United States and most of the commonwealth countries
English
 and get to know different cultures. That
year
 helped me to focus on my future and I grew up as a woman thanks to different experiences that I lived.
Secondly
, I know
this
 decision is hard to make but the majority of young girls and boys want to make their own money to contribute and pay what they need. People need to have responsibilities from a young age. I think that
this
 helps young people understand how life is.
For example
, since I was 16 that every summer I work to save my money so I can use it when I need it.
However
, take a gap
year
 to travel or work is not very important and it's not worth it for everyone.
This
 is because some people think that it can lead you to no longer want to study and to start the university. To conclude, I can say from my point of view that taking a
year
 after high school and before starting university is a good opportunity to understand what do you want to do in your future.
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