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In some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people to do this and give your opinion.

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There is no doubt that these days the travelling or working after finishing the high school is common. The question is, is the travel and work for a year before starting to study at university is the best option or not? In
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 essay, I am going to discuss my view and draw my personal conclusion. In terms of advantages, the amount of knowledge that can help the student for their future is can provided by travelling around the world. The main reason given to support
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 claim is that the travelling and working on expanding our knowledge of the life and help us to decide better our choices. To illustrate, working for company can tell you if the majority of the company is interesting for you or not. In my experience, I worked before in Alshaya company in Riyadh and I found that working in offices is so boring for me and I decide to study in health care aspects. 
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, travelling before entering college students will face.
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, some people said that one year is a lot for just travelling and they should spend their time more effectively in studying.
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 because they think that the age is a matter in the education. In conclusion,
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 the travelling and working after graduating from high school has some disadvantages, it can help the fresh graduate people to decide what specialization they really want. Therefor, I believe that young people should work before studying university.
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