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Growing number of overweight people put stress on healthcare system. Some people believe that Teaching about physical fitness at school is the solution for this while others don't believe in this. Discuss both views and give your opinion

#people #stress #healthcare #system #fitness #school
The line graph illustrates the alteration in the
amount
 of the
coffee
 exported from Brazil, Colombia and Costa Rica from 2002 to 2012. Overall, the
amount
 value of the
coffee
 exported s showed a fluctuation in the three countries, while the
amount
 of the
coffee
 exports in Cost Rica experienced a downward trend at the beginning of the period. In 2002, the
amount
 of
coffee
 exported s in
amount
 of Brazil and Colombia was 12
million
 and 5
million
 kilograms. Brazil’s exports increased sharply in 2008 and exceeding Colombia and Cost Rica exports and reaching 25
million
 kilograms by the end of the period. In 2008, Colombia exports hit a low of 2
million
 kilograms. During 2008 and 2012, Colombia’s exports have increased steadily to more that 10
million
 kilograms and it continued with a gradual increase to 15
million
 kilograms. In 2002, the
coffee
 exports in Cost Rica were 15
million
 Kilograms and it was the highest
amount
 among the three countries.
However
, it dropped dramatically to 7
million
 kilograms in 2006 and by the end of the period, it increased steadily to reach 20
million
 kilograms.
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