Caring for children is probably the most important thing of the society. It is suggested that all mothers and fathers should be required to take the childcare training courses. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

It is true that nourishing children is a difficult task. But I agree that childcare training courses could be beneficial to the young parents. Nowadays it
get
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gets
is getting
tough to
upbring
children in a decent manner not everyone is trained to be professional. In early age parent used to have 10-12 children in their family and as the elder one
grow
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grows
eventually it is their responsibility to look after the youngest.
This
helped them to understand and mature enough to look after their children. But now time has
change
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changed
people tend to have
nuclear family
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a nuclear family
. Young couple
get
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gets
busy with their daily schedule and they forget the most important task
that is
nourishing their children properly. The childcare training courses will help the young couples
to deal
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deal
with various
situation
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situations
which they will come across
for
example how
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example, how
to look after their
child
, what kind of food should be given to the infants, etc. The professionals will share their part of experiences which will help the young couples to understand the techniques and will likely help to avoid making any kind of mistakes. The need of children tends to change in different stages, as they
grow their
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grow, their
need, their style changes and it is necessary for the parents to understand and cope with their age and
upbring
formal attendance (in court or at a hearing) of a party in an action
appearing
. From the stage of infant to preteen of a
child
it is
crucial phase
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a crucial phase
as it is the moulding period of children and it is
necesary
absolutely essential
necessary
that the parents should give proper attention towards their children.
Well
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Well, this
this
crash
courses
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course
will help these young parents to deal with the situations arising while upbringing. Some might think that these crash courses could be
waste
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a waste
of
time but
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time, but
the truth is being a parent is much more difficult than any other role of a person's life.
Child
care training courses
is
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are
like a stepping hand for the upcoming young parents to understand the
importannce
the quality of being important and worthy of note
importance
and to keep
themself
reflexive form of "them"
themselves
away from committing
mistake
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mistakes
because their one mistake could
effect
have an effect upon
affect
the
child
's life. Apart from
this
it will save us from hiring a nanny for the children and we could give personal care to the children and will not miss those special moments. To recapitulate the
child
training course is beneficial course for the young parents to be and
this
will help them in
child
-rearing in various
manner
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manners
. And I would suggest that the future parents should take these crash courses and train
themself
reflexive form of "them"
themselves
so that they will abstain themselves from making any kind of mistakes.
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