Caring for children is probably the most important thing of the society. It is suggested that all mothers and fathers should be required to take the childcare training courses. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

It is true that nourishing children is a difficult task. But I agree that childcare training courses could be beneficial to the young parents. Nowadays it

get

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gets

is getting

tough to

upbring

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children in a decent manner not everyone is trained to be professional. In early age parent used to have 10-12 children in their family and as the elder one

grow

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grows

eventually it is their responsibility to look after the youngest.

This

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helped them to understand and mature enough to look after their children. But now time has

change

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changed

people tend to have

nuclear family

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a nuclear family

. Young couple

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gets

busy with their daily schedule and they forget the most important task

that is

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nourishing their children properly. The childcare training courses will help the young couples

to deal

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deal

with various

situation

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situations

which they will come across

for

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example how

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example, how

to look after their

child

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, what kind of food should be given to the infants, etc. The professionals will share their part of experiences which will help the young couples to understand the techniques and will likely help to avoid making any kind of mistakes. The need of children tends to change in different stages, as they

grow their

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grow, their

need, their style changes and it is necessary for the parents to understand and cope with their age and

upbring

formal attendance (in court or at a hearing) of a party in an action

appearing

. From the stage of infant to preteen of a

child

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it is

crucial phase

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a crucial phase

as it is the moulding period of children and it is

necesary

absolutely essential

necessary

that the parents should give proper attention towards their children.

Well

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Well, this

this

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crash

courses

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course

will help these young parents to deal with the situations arising while upbringing. Some might think that these crash courses could be

waste

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a waste

of

time but

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time, but

the truth is being a parent is much more difficult than any other role of a person's life.

Child

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care training courses

is

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are

like a stepping hand for the upcoming young parents to understand the

importannce

the quality of being important and worthy of note

importance

and to keep

themself

reflexive form of "them"

themselves

away from committing

mistake

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mistakes

because their one mistake could

effect

have an effect upon

affect

the

child

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's life. Apart from

this

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it will save us from hiring a nanny for the children and we could give personal care to the children and will not miss those special moments. To recapitulate the

child

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training course is beneficial course for the young parents to be and

this

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will help them in

child

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-rearing in various

manner

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manners

. And I would suggest that the future parents should take these crash courses and train

themself

reflexive form of "them"

themselves

so that they will abstain themselves from making any kind of mistakes.