IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 7.5

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #time #loss #species #plants #animals
It is an irrefutable fact that the current situation of our environment getting worst day by day. Some people assert that the major consequences are the deforestation and killing wildlife, whereas other thinks that there are many other factors
also
 involve in
this
 problem. In my opinion, both sides have their own equal effects on the environment. In
this
 essay, I intend to discuss both views before reasonable conclusion can be drawn. There are several drawback on our earth's atmosphere.
Firstly
, the increasing population the world is the one the major reason, because there are tons of forest were cut down every year to settle down the new civilization. Because of
this
, the chain cycle getting worst and become directly effect on the life cycle of animals who depend on the forests. For an example, the population of marine life about to 20 percent on downfall every year because of hunting.
On the contrary
 side, some people feel that there are some other issues
also
 more effective,
such
 as rapidly increasing pollution on our world. Air pollution is one of them, the automobile industry sells tons of cars and bikes on the market, which emits carbon dioxide gas in the air.
Therefore
, the result shown in the ozone layer destruction and drastic changes can be seen on the weather condition and missing animal species. According to experts, in upcoming
next
 20 years, global warming hits to the peak point. To put in a nutshell, I pen down and say that there are more points to be noticed which are linked to the plants and species. At the end, we have to focus on those steps and preserve our beautiful earth for our
next
 generation,
otherwise
 it’s too late.
Submitted by Abcd Dcba on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
What to do next:
Look at other essays: