some people think that it is beneficial to travel abroad, but others think it is unnecessary because we have the Internet and TV. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

These days, because of developed technology, we can travel abroad easier and faster by aeroplane than in the past. Some people prefer to travel
abroad
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abroad, however, others
abroad, however others
however
others are satisfied with travelling by watching a TV program and searching the Internet. I think that travelling abroad has
the greatest
Suggestion
greater
benefits than travelling through TV and the Internet. The greatest advantage of travelling on TV and the Internet is saving money and
time
. Travelling abroad is spending much
time
in the aeroplane
besides
the cost of the plane is very expensive. It is not affected by the weather,
time
and place.
Moreover
, It gains much detailed information about the country’s festivals or their oriental food and discovers
other new nation
Suggestion
an other new nation
that we do not know well.
However
, there has the biggest disadvantage that can not vividly experience
such
as participate festivals and eat exotic food.
On the other hand
, travelling abroad can experience firsthand about eating exotic food, enjoying festivals and lives like their lifestyle. Through taste, we can learn about their cultures and get memories.
Also
, It has opportunities to improve communication skills and to make new foreign friends. Despite these benefits, travelled abroad spend much
time
and a lot of money and affect the weather.
For example
, if the weather is
badly
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bad
like raining,
coming
the act of appeasing (as by acceding to the demands of)
calming
storms and typhoon during travelling, we stay at the hotel and
can not
can not
cannot
go out outside. Personally, I think that travelling abroad has many advantages like those mentioned above.
Although
spending much money and
time
to travel
abroad we
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abroad, we
can valuable experience
firsthand
Suggestion
first hand
exotic cultures and their lifestyle.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • opportunity
  • exposure
  • cultural diversity
  • explore
  • immersive experience
  • language proficiency
  • intercultural communication
  • networking
  • global perspective
  • adaptability
  • experience new things
  • broaden horizons
  • virtual resources
  • convenience
  • accessibility
  • information overload
  • virtual reality
  • face-to-face interaction
  • personal connections
  • empathy
  • appreciation
  • unique
  • memorable
  • transformative
  • educational
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