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Some people think that a car is the best way to travel in cities while others believe a bicycle is a better way to commute. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Vehicle
Suggestion
The vehicle
 has now
became
Suggestion
become
 a part of travelling and It is observed by some people that in urban areas the use of
car
Suggestion
the car
 is much better; whilst, there
are
Suggestion
is
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 group of people That give much priority to
bycicle
a wheeled vehicle that has two wheels and is moved by foot pedals
bicycle
 for roaming around the
city
. Well
,
Accept space
,
in
this
case both
Accept comma addition
case, both
 of
suggestions
Suggestion
the suggestions
 will be arguments ahead along with my opinion.
To Begin
 with the former view, vehicles
such
 as cars are ahead more better
way
 when it comes to
travelers
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 into the
city
,
Accept space
,
in
this
 case
this
 leads to more
show
Suggestion
shows
 off when the lifestyle
are advanced
Suggestion
is advanced
,
Accept space
,
to be more precise, mostly the drivers think that it shows personally if they roam in the
city
 with preferred cars.
On the contrary
, the supreme
way
 to pass through in
city
Suggestion
the city
a city
 it is obviously a bicycle, and
this
 can reduce traffic congestion. In
this
 issue it is well understood that considering the size and of course traffic, it would be much easier to travel around
,
Accept space
,
moreover
this
 can reduce the waste of time in
this
 waiting period of traffic
,
Accept space
,
furthermore
,
Accept space
,
there's always a
way
 for cycle commuters in
busy
Suggestion
a busy city
busy cities
the busy city
city
. Considering the both
part
Suggestion
parts
 of argument related to vehicle in urban areas, there's always a path for each, meanwhile when it
come
Suggestion
comes
 to fame the use of
car
Suggestion
a car
 is much
,
Accept space
,
but if taking to mind much easier
way
 it is definitely a
bycicle
a wheeled vehicle that has two wheels and is moved by foot pedals
bicycle
.
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