in spite of the advance made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. why is this the case? what can be done about this problem?

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Nowadays,

agriculture

is very much advanced with new technology and seed germination process, but still people are not able to have at least one meal of the

day

and remain hungry.

However

, while our

agriculture

department is now supported by latest technology, I believe we should take some action so that no one in the world dies due to hunger. Our

day

starts with a meal and ends with a meal,

food

is the most essential part of our life.

Firstly

, the government sector and even private companies like Amazon and Google has specially designed laboratories to do research on

food

cultivation and seed germination. All are focusing particularly on how to grow

food

more effectively with high rich in fibre and in quantity.

For example

, a research in 2009, by the University of America declared that, developed countries

such

as Canada and America spent around 3 billion dollars on

agriculture

related technology. Because of which they were able to increase their

food

supply.

Furthermore

, in developing countries raw vegetables are affordable.

On the other hand

, despite of having plenty of the

agriculture

advances, we notice clips on

day

Suggestion

the day

day

newspapers that people lost their lives due to hunger. The particular causes we notice are stored and serving, either we are developed or developing countries, our

food

storage and supply capacity and quality are very poor.

For instance

, local authority takes part on these issues several times still no proper flowchart has been developed. The government in every country has departments which take care of poor and hungry people, and they distribute vegetable, grains and rice to the poor and below poverty line at a subsidized price. Still having people dies in hunger means problem is not solved. In my opinion, a proper storage technique and a proper supply chain are the solution of

this

problem, being advanced in research on

agriculture

and being an expert in cultivation is not only key. We have to think about logistic as well, we lose tons and tons of grains every year, because we didn’t stored in well.

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in spite of the advance made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. why is this the case? what can be done about this problem?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Multinational companies are becoming increasingly common in developing countries. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

Some believe children should be taught to give speeches and presentations in school. Why is this? What other skills do you think it is important to be taught in schools?

Some people believe that there are many reasons that can motivate a person to keep working for the same company whereas others say that money is the main reason. Do you agree or disagree

When designing buildings people should consider the intended use rather than appearance. Do you agree or disagree?

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