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Advertisements encourage people to buy in quantity rather than promote quality. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Write at least 250 English words.

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In modern society, advertisements are recognized as an efficient and intelligible measure to attract great attention of various consumers so that we can see them at a glance while keeping our eyes on the roads. There is no denying the fact that advertisements are playing an essential role in making profits for the companies. To take one example, during the period of world cup in 2018, the beer companies
such
 as Budweiser, Heineken pay more attention to the advertisements to enhance the sales in the market. The survey shows that there was a steep rise of the consumption of beers on
year
Suggestion
a year
-on-year basis. From aspect of
consumption
Suggestion
consumer
 psychology, customers usually succumb to the temptation of creative advertisements and rush to purchase the products, especially the new arrivals.
However
, sometimes quite a few products exhibited in the advertisements are not as same as those you buy. And the buyers are disappointed by the low
quality
 of the goods. What is more, some companies pay a tremendous amount of money to bid for better places or headlines on the famous newspapers or websites to demonstrate the advertisements. That means companies will cut more budgets on research and development of products. In a word, to some extent, more advertisements there are, lower
quality
 of goods the companies produce. To sum up, every coin has two sides. A far-sighted company always has the ability
of
Suggestion
to
 balance the financial expenditure between advertisements and the
quality
 of goods. It is a good choice to spend on advertisements while the
quality
 is absolutely guaranteed.
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