Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is import for children to make decisions about matters that affect them. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, people’s views about giving freedom to
young generation
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the young generation
to make decisions on everyday are controversial. Some people think it leads to a selfish society while others believe that it is essential to make
choice
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choices
a choice
the choice
that has
effect
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an effect
on them. In my opinion, to give liberty to children can bring
up creative people
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up with creative people
. On the one hand, giving permission to
child
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the child
to do whatever he or she want may cause several problems.
Initially
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, the children will become gradually rude,
for example
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,
first
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they will start denying healthy foods which they do not want to eat.
Secondly
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, children would become self-
centered
being or placed in the center
centred
who
do not care
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does not care
about others and only think about their own benefits in every situation.
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, the group of selfish people
lead
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leads
to the slump of society.
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, parents must limit the freedom of choice for children until they grow up.
On the other hand
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, too much control on the children can make them fearful,
unconfident
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people. So, it is vital to give liberty
for
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to
children in order to bring up them creative, independent and self-confident.
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, allowing children to make decisions will teach them to conclude from mistakes.
For example
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, once
child
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a child
the child
had played with fire and burned his finger, he will never do
this
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again. In
this
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competitive world, we have a huge demand for these kind of people and only they can take us to
bright future
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a bright future
the bright future
. To sum up, giving freedom to children may seem
unwisely but
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unwisely, but
it is worth to do it. I think
children’s bad behavior
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the children’s bad behaviour
children’s bad behaviour
more depends on the atmosphere they grow up
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then
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than
making decision on everyday matters. For
this
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reasons
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reason
I strongly believe that
this
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trend has more advantages to
community
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the community
.
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