It is better to live away from home during college education than to stay with your parents. Do you agree or disagree?

As the candidate’s employer, what I came to notice is her ever-present strong passion and exuberance during her 12 years being a Biology teacher in Lao
Cai
Suggestion
CAI
high
school
for gifted students. She has always been the one who turned up early with everything prepared carefully whether it is meetings or classes. Not to mention,
although
she usually has to teach long hours, she never runs out of patience for her students and her classes have always been among the funniest and most informative of all the teachers’ in our
school
, if not the most with her creativity in her teaching method.
Furthermore
, she
also
has helped many students achieve great achievements
such
as national competitions, scholarships from prestigious universities, which I believe is a great asset to our
school
as many are reluctant to sacrifice their spare time for their families to aid students in their projects like Ms. Chu. These projects lasted for months and only a few in our
school
could handle
such
time-consuming tasks. Most importantly, our
school
is in desperate need for high-qualified teachers.
Therefore
, given her achievements and her dedication to her job, Ms. Chu should be considered for your scholarship.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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