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Computers are being used more and more in education. Some people say that this is a positive trend, while others argue that it is leading to negative consequences. Discuss both sides of this argument and then give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, a large percentage of people about 95% use computers in education. Over the years the
computer
 has been named as the most useful object in school institutions. In
this
 essay, I will discuss about the advantages and disadvantages and I will give my personal opinion about it.
First
 and foremost, the majority of school institutions replaced books with computers. Students with a simple
computer
 can do research on different subjects, can send emails or take notes about the lesson who they follow, they can do a virtual presentation showing to their classmates and professors their works.
For example
, when I went to high school, I remember that I used it for every subject
in particular
 for research in science and history.
Furthermore
, I used my personal laptop to write essays in English, French and Italian and I sent via email to the teacher. In my own opinion, I think computers are useful for everyone and
moreover
, they are comfortable because wherever you will go you can take with you.
Secondly
, laptops are useful to people who work in office or in bank. Thank to them, people can find out stuff faster compared to books. In fact, you only need to click buttons and in few seconds you can find whatever you need to know. I believe, that laptops are a technological friend to us. I know
this
 is a bit strange but they answer to what we want to know.
On the other hand
, not everyone has accepted computers, particularly old people.
This
 because they grew up with books and not with smart stuff. They do not understand their worth. Indeed, they think it is just a means of distractions. To conclude, over the years
computer
 has taken value. For that reason, I think
computer
Suggestion
the computer
 is very useful for everyone
in particular
 to students and office workers.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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