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The disadvantages of tourism in less developed countries are as great as the advantages. What is your opinion?

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In
this
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 day and age, the tourism sector is in the limelight and has aroused.
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, some people believe that in underdeveloped countries tourism disadvantage is similar to the advantages, while others do not agree with it. My view is that advantages overweight the disadvantages and illustrate it in the essay below. On the one hand, Toursim sector plays a pivotal role in the provincial economy by creating jobs for a number of people. Not only single industry takes benefit of it, but other indirect trade will
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 up. To illustrate, transport companies are
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 linked to travel, if the number of visitor increases in a developing country,
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 the profits of private or public convenience increase.
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, Travel has multiple advantages for underprivileged nations.
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, Toursim comes with many liabilities. The total responsibility of the visitor has to be taken by host nation due to which security expenses increases.
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, Many nations charge heavily for tourists to cope with
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 problem.
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, Bhutan has recently increased his Visa fees to manage the money loss.
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, Underdeveloped nations are creating solutions to reduce the limits of travel. To Conclude, Tourism has an overhead for less developed countries,
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, we have many examples where these countries have turned it into an opportunity so for them it act as a blessing in disguise.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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