Some people feel that education should be provided exclusively by the state and private education should be prohibited. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some
belive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
believed
belief
that a country should provide a specific
education
system
availble
obtainable or accessible and ready for use or service
available
for all
citzens
a native or naturalized member of a state or other political community
citizens
.These people argue that private institutions should be abolished. In my opinion
,
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,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
disagree with the previous
statment
a message that is stated or declared; a communication (oral or written) setting forth particulars or facts etc
statement
statements
,
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,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
belive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
people are entitled to choose their suitable
education
where private or public
.
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.
To start with
,
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,
in
today s
the present time or age
todays
modern
era most
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era, most
metropolitan cities
have
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has
plenty of immigrants with
diffirent
unlike in nature or quality or form or degree
different
cultures and religion
belives
any cognitive content held as true
beliefs
. If
gouvernments
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
forces all
citzens
a native or naturalized member of a state or other political community
citizens
to
attent
be present at (meetings, church services, university), etc.
attend
public schools with specific
circulumm
an integrated course of academic studies
curriculum
that might not be suitable for
every one
all people
everyone
, bulling and prejudice may increase among pupils
.
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.
A
sientific
of or relating to the practice of science
scientific
study rolled up by a
prestegious
having an illustrious reputation; respected
prestigious
journal in
vancouver
English navigator remembered for his exploration of the Pacific coast of North America (1757-1798)
Vancouver
revealed that most
muslim
of or relating to or supporting Islamism
Muslim
families living in
canada
a nation in northern North America; the French were the first Europeans to settle in mainland Canada
Canada
opt to
sent
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send
their offsprings to specific
islamic
of or relating to or supporting Islamism
Islamic
schools in rather that public ones in order to teach their children their religion
rirtual
any customary observance or practice
ritual
from a young age
.
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As a
result most
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result, most
develloped
being changed over time so as to be e.g. stronger or more complete or more useful
developed
countries
offers
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offer
a
varatity
a collection containing a variety of sorts of things
variety
of
education
system
Futhermore unlike
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Furthermore, unlike
Furthermore unlike
public school, most private
education
systems are not free, parents often have to pay a specific fee to
enroll
register formally as a participant or member
enrol
their children, because they
recive
get something; come into possession of
receive
extra subjects
such
as a
forgein
of concern to or concerning the affairs of other nations (other than your own)
foreign
language. Children in private schools often learn to master two or three
language
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languages
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..
wich
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Which
Wich
will eventually increase their future
carrier
the particular occupation for which you are trained
career
prospects.
Moreover
, these private
instutions
an organization founded and united for a specific purpose
institutions
offer plenty of job
opprotunities
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
opportunities
from
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for
teachers
,
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,
janitorial staff, bus
divers
the operator of a motor vehicle
drivers
.
thus they
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Thus, they
Thus they
contribute greatly to the economy and the
prospety
an economic state of growth with rising profits and full employment
prosperity
prospect
of the country
.
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To conclude
,
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,
banning private
instituions
an organization founded and united for a specific purpose
institutions
may bring many demerits as these schools provide distinctive
education
systems needed for future
distingish
mark as different
distinguish
citzens
a native or naturalized member of a state or other political community
citizens
.
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