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In many cities, young people prefer shopping as a form of leisure activity. Why do you think this happens? Is it a positive or negative development?

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The shopping is one of the most preferred leisure activities among youngsters in many cities across the world. The globalization, advertisement and fashion industry are the main reasons for
this
 trend of excessive shopping. In my own perspective, it has more demerits than merits due to wastage of money, time and efforts.
To begin
 with, most of the cities don’t have recreational centres
such
 as sports club or health fitness centres which they can use to spend their leisure time.
Consequently
, most of the people prefer to do shopping as their pleasurable activity to break the monotonous routine from their busy work schedule and to replenish themselves from their exhaustion level.
Additionally
, the globalization and development of digital technology have made an easy availability of merchandise worldwide.
Thus
, the customers can shop easily online or buy from the stores which are open in the majority of cities across the world.
Moreover
, the advertising by hiring the famous personalities and celebrities with the use of the social media applications, newspapers and television has raised the awareness level among the public about the recent trends and influence their shopping habit. Contrarily, the people are spending money excessively to buy the latest trends of mobile phones, clothing, cosmetics and gadgets, and
thus
, ruining their savings and putting themselves under financial debt.
In addition
 to it, it has given rise to throw away culture by unnecessary buying and disposing of the old working products,
however
,
this
 has put a large burden on the environmental resources.
For instance
, the killing of wildlife animals
such
 as crocodiles is done for the leather items and woollen clothes. In fact, they should be encouraged to use their leisure time by doing some healthy hobbies
such
 as cycling, gardening, and running. To recapitulate, the awareness level among the youngsters must be raised to follow the healthy hobbies in spite of doing excessive binge shopping and adopting throw away culture.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • disposable income
  • leisure activity
  • retail therapy
  • local economies
  • fashion trends
  • peer pressure
  • social status
  • environmental impact
  • consumption
  • waste
  • materialistic
  • cultural activities
  • prominent
  • neglect
  • therapeutic
  • social media influence
  • boost
  • desire
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