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Nowadays, entertainers get paid more than politicians. What are the reasons for this? Is this a negative or positive development?

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One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is celebrities earn a good living better than statesmen.
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 essay will
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 discuss that an idol has a significant number of fan groups, who help the best up - and – coming person to make a success of a financial budget and,
secondly
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, it is a
favorable
encouraging or approving or pleasing
favourable
 growth when your natural and
skillful
having or showing knowledge and skill and aptitude
skilful
 talent merits deservedly. One of the main reasons is the extraordinary support of fans in
favor
promote over another
favour
 of a celeb. It is not an open secret for the celeb that the key to a meteoric rise to fame in financial question is the purchasing power of aficionado. Little do people realise that the more they buy songs, books, watch movies of their idols, the more their idol will make a living.
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, Forbes demonstrated that the activity of fans resulted in rocketing sales of the ticket concert of Beyoncé. After
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 situation, she has become a millionaire. With regards to the question of a positive moment, I consider that a peerless gift should be a lucrative job in the long run, because celebrities are the face of the country.
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, if you show to the world your fruitful work and an unparalleled talent, you will carve a niche for yourself. To illustrate, The Times has recently reported that The United States has the highest percentage of investment in talented artists because they raise the country's economy and image to the highest level. In conclusion, I can cast light on those politicians earn less not only because they don't have as strong a fan base as celebrities, who will always support, but
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, deep down, I think that
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 a positive development because a natural talent should be profitable after all a genial person create an image of the country.
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