Now a days celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth rather than for their achievements,and this sets a bad example to young people. To what extend do you agree or disagree.

In the recent times, youth was becoming more cautious about their wealth and glamour. They are trying to adopt what the film stars, dancers, musicians and other celebrities did

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because of their imitating character.So I believe that the

celebraties

a widely known person

celebrities

should be responsible to give importance to their achievements rather than the physical outlook.

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the celebrities gives more importance to the general public and trying to become a role model to them.They can use their excess wealth for donating the education of poor child's. Not only the education but

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can give importance to their extra curricular activities

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Both these will help make a better citizen

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our society. Recently Hollywood actors and actresses conducting a big television show and utilize the profit to donate to the poor students.

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It should be good

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If popular persons engaged in any environmental protection activities to encourage our youngsters. If they take initiative for minimisation of deposit of garbage which harmful to our earth and soil

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eventually the youth

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will take part to protect the environment

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Meanwhile our

belonging to or on behalf of a specified person (especially yourself); preceded by a possessive

own

life

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be protected.In the modern world plethora of ways to communicate with the public to give awareness to the society. They can use different social medians like

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, Facebook

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Instagram so on. In the

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environmental day one of the main drama group in Kerala conducting a live drama about the consequences of deposit of garbage in the public places.It will be a great motivation and government appreciate them for their dedication. To conclude,

celebraties

behave as expected during of holidays or rites

celebrates

celebrate

responsibility towards our

soceity

an extended social group having a distinctive cultural and economic organization

society

is not only limited with entertainment but

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to be take a great part in the success of citizens.

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Jun 14, 2020

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.5

Complete response

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Relevant & specific examples

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275 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

glamour
wealth
achievements
portrayed
overshadow
influenced
lifestyles
unrealistic
expectations
values
promoting
hard work
perseverance
inspire
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