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In some countries more and more shops are open longer hours every day. What are the positive and negative developments of this?

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A competitive world has made numerous shop owners to open their showrooms for a longer duration of the all days of the week. There are various advantages and disadvantages to
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 trend. On the one hand, opening shops for a long hour helps in expanding the businesses by increasing the sales and
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, generating more profits and boosting the economy.
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, it provides the employment as workers are needed to work during the day, night shift work schedule and
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, improving their standard of living.
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, it increases the market accessibility of the products as working customers can buy items at any hour of the day due to their busy schedule and don’t have to take a day off from their job.
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, some can buy fresh food items
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 as vegetables and fruits on a daily basis.
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,
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 work culture affects the personal life by giving less time to the family responsibilities and relationships.
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, the children of both working parents spend most of their time by watching television and playing video games which put negative effects on their psychological development.
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 to it, they focus gets diverted from the studies to the distractions
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 as social media applications under the lack of constant supervision of their guardians.
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, the employees are left with a very little time for their own health by getting involved in the regular physical exercises and cooking healthy food at home. To recapitulate, regardless of few demerits, the prolonged opening of the market helps in generating employments, making large earnings and
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, results in the overall development of the country.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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