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. These days, many people prefer ready to eat food outside of their home rather than homemade food. Do you think this has more advantages or disadvantages?

#people #food #home
The given pie charts depict the
percentage
 of British pupils at one university who apart from English dominated to speak other languages in 2000 and 2010. Overall, the
proportion
 of British students who knew two or more
language
 increase in 2010 compared with 2000.
In addition
, for both years, the
percentage
 of students who were able to speak Spanish were more than others. In 2000, one fifth of students did not know any
language
 except English,
this
proportion
 decreased in 2010, and just 10% of students were one-lingual. The
proportion
 of
studentswho
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students who
 spoke German,
in addition
 to English, was the same for both years (10%).
In addition
, bilingual students who could speak Spanish, increased from 30% in 2000 to 35% in 2010. The
percentage
 of pupils at university, who had the ability of speaking another
language
 and French only were identical in 2000, but, in 2010,
proportion
 of another
language
 experienced a 5% increase to 20% and French only
percentage
 decrease from 15% to 10%.
Moreover
, the
proportion
 of trilingual SUGGESTION
students
Suggestion
Students
student
Suggestion
The student
Student
also
 increased by 5%.
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