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Computers are being used more and more in education. Some people say that this is a positive trend, while others argue that it is leading to negative consequences. Discuss both sides of this argument and then give your own opinion

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It is true that
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the use
 of
computer
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 becomes popular in educational fields. Some people think that
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 technology dives can bring more benefits to the school while others argue that
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 trend will become an unpredictable crisis. I believe that uses of computers are obviously essential for every student to practice it for educational purpose. On the one hand, some people think that
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a computer
computers
 can
cause
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 health problems because students are spending too much time on it. Some students are overused the
computer
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 to do their assignments and the result can
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 of physical damage
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 short sight, back pain and headache. Most students are addicted to using
Computer
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 in order to have fun so they normally spend more time on it.
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, there are some benefits to
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 of
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computer but
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a computer, but
a computer but
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 can
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 negative results if we ever
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 it.
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,
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 is essential that can
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 in a variety of educational research,
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 as doing assignment, present the presentations. Teachers can
use
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 it to present a diverse style of teaching and the class will be more interest that can attract those students to focus on the lesson.
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, in the past, most students felt bored in a history class because it is difficult to imagine what had happened in the past from the tutorial. Nowadays, teachers can
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a computer
the computer
computers
 to do the presentation of present the historical images in order to attract student’s interest on it. I believe
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 of computers is an unpreventable trend that going to change in the educational system and the result certainly brings more advantages to
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 field. In conclusion,
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 of computers can
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 some physical problems in our body, I believe that in educational field certainly have more advantages outweigh its disadvantages.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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