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One of your friends in a foreign country is starting an import-export business, and he has asked you to recommend a product from your country to him. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, -Say what product you want to recommend to him -Tell him/her where he/she can get this product -Explain why you want to recommend this product

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Hi Ishu, I came to know that, you are interested in the export-import business, you are searching for a product, which is more demanding and good enough for a business point of view. As I am living in Mumbai city in India and have market experience in multiple sectors
consequently
, I would recommend you
to
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apply
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apply sunscreen lotion as a cosmetic.
In addition
, these products are good for daily basis skincare , and these particular products are used by men and women both to protect themselves the UV rays
while
 going out whether going to beach areas or at any tourist place.
Secondly
,
this
 cosmetic product's raw material is very easy to get for manufacturing purposes and you can start an import-export business smoothly
moreover
, you will get good profit all the way. Please feel free to contact me if you have any problems, I will help you with any
further
 process in the activity. Lots of love Regards Rohit
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suitable writing tone
Try to maintain a more formal tone throughout the letter, especially since it is related to business.
single idea per paragraph
Make sure to clearly separate different ideas into distinct paragraphs for better clarity.
logical structure
A few grammatical and punctuation errors can be corrected to enhance the overall clarity and professionalism of your letter. For instance, 'apply sunscreen lotion as a cosmetic' should be 'sunscreen lotion as a cosmetic product'.
complete response
The recommendation is clear and relevant, showing good task achievement.
greeting and closing
The greeting and closing are appropriate and add a personal touch.
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