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Overpopulation in many major urban centres around the world is a major problem. What are the causes of this? How can this be solved

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The growing population in the central areas of major cities in the world has become a serious
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 and solutions that can solve it. Overpopulation is caused by some factors.
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, many people are attracted by more employment opportunities in city centres. As it has been known that big companies and organisations tend to set up their businesses in central business districts, and a large number of job-seekers tend to move to urban centres where they would be closer to these opportunities. Another point is that living in the city centre means more public resources and services would be available around.
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, people who live in the Melbourne city are able to access to free public transport and excellent playgrounds while those who lives in the other areas cannot use these services. There is no doubt that the increasing number of people move from other places to cities in order to pursue a better quality of life, There are effective solutions to the
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 of overpopulation in the urban centres. To address
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 issue, the government should take measures to create more jobs outside the urban areas
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 as developing local tourist industry. By doing
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, people will secure a job and work in their local areas,
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 of leaving for an opportunity in big cities. Upgrading infrastructure and improve public services in regional and rural areas should be given equal attention. The solution will help people living out of cities to enhance their quality of life. In conclusion, more employment opportunities and unbalanced public resources play an important role in contributing to overcrowding in major cities. While creating more jobs and provide better public services would be useful to tackle the
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