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When so many people are starving to death in different parts of the world, do you think it is justifiable for any government to spend money on Space Exploration Projects? Give your views

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In
this
 advanced era, where every
country
 is mad before the new exploration either in
space
 or other in making their names they are forgetting to feed some of the basic needs of their countries like
hunger
 poverty
etcetera
. So, I think the government should work on these platforms. In the
country
 like India, which is now focusing on making its name in the
space
 industry either in the moon mission or mars mission a huge amount of money is spent on these projects. According to the reports, 141 million US Dollar was spent on mission
chandrayaan
Suggestion
Chandrayaan
 2
.
Accept space
.
 If
this
 huge amount was spent on providing food
instead
 would have reduced the level of poverty. One should not forget that
lives
Suggestion
the lives
 of countrymen matter much and is above
all for
Accept comma addition
all, for
 a nation to be successful as real progress a
country
 does is seen by well being of its people. According to global
hunger
 index report of 2019
,
Accept space
,
India ranked 102 on the level of
hunger
 with the rate of 30.3. If people will starve due to
hunger
 who will make the machines for
space
 explorations? Countrymen are the one on whom the whole
country
 feels proud if these people will starve who will progress?So, one should feed these people
instead
 of making
space
 exploration.
To conclu
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conclude, I
conclude I
de i would like to state that the countrymen are above all and they are the pillars and we should work
for
definite article
the
this
thei
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