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Some people believe that success comes from hard work. Others believe that success has to do with luck. Which opinion do you agree with and why? Give specific details and examples to support your opinion.

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Success in any field is very enjoyable, but many people only talk about triumph and do not have specific ideas and words about how to succeed. Some believe that success comes from hard endeavour and perseverance, while others believe that success depends on luck. In
this
 article, I want to talk about these two perspectives. At
first
 glance, it seems that with effort, you can succeed in anything.
This
 is the opinion of most people; The reason for
this
 is obvious, because someone who makes the most of his time and suffers a lot of hardships deserves victory in order to achieve a positive result
that is
 beneficial to both himself and his community.
For example
, Mark Zuckerberg, has been able to make great strides in the world of technology and communication in the present century through his hard work and the use of his open and creative mind. Let me state that my view of triumph is closer to
this
 view.
On the other hand
, a group of people believe that success can only be achieved through luck.
This
 is true of some people, but few people in the world succeed in
this
 way.
However
,
this
 view can be a great disappointment, because with
this
 mindset, people who are trying and trying will never succeed. They do not work, and these calls into question the concept of living to achieve dreams. Every year,
for example
, only one American wins the lottery for $100 million.
As a result
, you have to work hard to succeed in any field. Of course, it is
also
 a fact that having luck is a very attractive option that can make any human being reach the peak of progress. It can happen in the life of us, we just have to look at our lives with a positive mind.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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