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Some people are of the opinion that there should be a car-free day once every month, on which no private vehicles are allowed on the road. Discuss the advantages and possible disadvantages.

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Nowaday's few
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Nowadays, few
Nowadays few
 people believe that at least once in a
month
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 people should avoid using private vehicles for commuting.
This
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car
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 free
day
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 once in a
month
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. One evident benefit to have a
car
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 free
day
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 in a
month
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 includes
decongestion
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 of roads which helps to save
environment
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the environment
 by reducing pollution. As there are less vehicles or no vehicles on
road
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the road
 there is less carbon-dioxide
emissions
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emissions, hence
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 can improve the air quality in urban areas. To cite an example, when
lockdown
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the lockdown
 was imposed in various cities where movement of private vehicles were limited, air quality in these cities
have improved
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has improved
 significantly and nature is slowly reviving itself
.
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.
 Apart from that,
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 move can
also
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 encourage people to opt for public
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transport which
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transport, which
 indeed generates revenue for the
government which
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government, which
 can be put to better use for public welfare and infrastructure.
On the contrary
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,
car
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 free
day
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 has its own set of disadvantages.
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Firstly one
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Firstly, one
 cannot move around as per his or her convenience. One needs to be on or before time to board the public
transport
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 to reach their destination on time. As an example, in
case
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the case
 of
bandhs
an unofficial association of people or groups
bands
 when public
transport
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 remains suspended it can affect common man's work routine if a
car
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 free
day
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 is imposed.
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, with more people opting for public
transport
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, there will be overcrowding in trains and busses which in turn will lead to fights, thefts
etc
continuing in the same way
etc.
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 altering people's lives. To sum up, while there are plus points of having a
car
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 free
day
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 in a
month
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 like improved air quality, increased use of public
transport
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,
this
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 decision
also
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 comes with some setbacks
such
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 as its less convenient
,
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,
overcrowded
tranport
move something or somebody around; usually over long distances
transport
 etc. So minimum usage of private vehicles can help fixing
this
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 issue.
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