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In some countries, it is becoming increasingly common for people to follow a vegetarian diet. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

#countries #people #diet #outweigh
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It is rightly said that a healthy mind lies in a healthy
body
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.People from all around the globe are constantly changing their eating habits.
Food
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 is a source of nutrition for all of us and it not only provides nutrients, but is a supplier of vitamins minerals and carbohydrates.Taking a balanced
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diet
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diet, thus
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 becomes a very important phenomena.My essay will highlight certain points about the benefits of vegetarian
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 and the increasing popularity of vegetarian
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 amongst people today. Individuals are focused on taking a rich and balanced
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diet which
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diet, which
 includes all essential supplies which our
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 needs.Taking about vegetarian
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diet they
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diet, they
 are more focussed on including tofu
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milk
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soya
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pulses which keeps their
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 full of vitamins.The vegetarian
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 helps to keep them refreshed and balance the pH content in their
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.Vegetarian
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 has a low mass
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 index
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 reducing the problems of obesity in the humans.On the contrast, non vegetarian
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 consists of meat
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chicken, which is overall not very beneficial for people. Eating non vegetarian only increases the
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 mass index and
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 leading to obesity and high blood pressure.The
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 of the individual don't actually require meat
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it is just a pleasure for some people eating non vegetarian
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 has no better advantage for
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 individual. So I will conclude my essay by saying that the shift of more and more on vegetarian
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 is a good example of making people realize the importance of other meat and chicken who are dying everyday just to fulfil the pleasure of the people across the globe.In my opinion vegetarian
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 is nutritious and is the key to make a
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 worth living.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Vegetarian diet
  • Chronic diseases
  • Carbon footprint
  • Deforestation
  • Animal welfare
  • Nutritional deficiencies
  • Balanced intake
  • Societal norms
  • Meat-dominant
  • Sustainable living
  • Plant-based proteins
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