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The tradition that the family gets together to eat meals is disappearing. What are the reasons? What are the impacts?

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The tradition of sitting together and having a meal is years old. Previously, people used to enjoy, share stories of their
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 and have a good time with their family at the dinner table.
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 culture is rapidly disappearing and there are several reasons behind it.
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, we are leading a fast life nowadays and the young generation is occupied with their education and work. The competition, which is fierce now, is the main reason of their busy schedule.
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, as I work late, I miss the family dinner almost every other
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, even if we try, it’s not possible sometimes to have a meal together. Another point to consider is that, after an exhausting
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, it might be stressful for some people having a chat or discussion late at night, especially when they will have to return to work the
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. I have seen many people go straight to bed after coming home and leave early the
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, the lack of time can be another reason behind
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 vanishing practice.
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, families are scattered throughout the world these days.
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, many of my friends stay abroad and come to their home country only once a year.
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, it is not possible for them to sit together and have a hearty conversation every
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, it is true that a family meal is a rare sight now and it can have several negative side effects. On the one hand, the bonding between the family members are loosening and
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, loneliness are creeping in, increasing the number of mental health problems and suicide. To conclude, according to me, we should value our family and should enjoy even the little time we get to spend each other, while we are alive.
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 will not only increase the love that a family share among themselves, but
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 will nurture us emotionally.
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