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It is better the students to live away from the home during their university studies rather than staying with their parents. To what extend you agree or disagree?

#students #home #university #studies #parents
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In the past few decades the number of students going to live away from home during university is increasing exponentially. Some people assert that
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 action is the best choice of the youth. Some others defend that in university the student needs a quiet place to focus only on studies, because
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 the house
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 is the best place to stay a focus only on studies. In my opinion, all the students should study far away from home. Both of those ideas shall
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 essay, discuss in the following paragraphs. The
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 point to contemplate is regarding the fact that at youth, all that they need is self-knowledge. Leaving the
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's house makes them unplug the line with mom and dad. They will discover a new world, new
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, new friends and can look the
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 in a new perspective.
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, they develop the responsibility sense, developing self-confidence and get strong for the real
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. In my opinion, all university students should go live in another city or even far from their
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 for a couple of years.
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, a survey conducted by a University of my city revealed that students who live on campus or share houses with others, develop more creativity than the others who still live with
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, the opponents of the above idea defend that people at 17/18 years old have no psychological structure to live by themselves, and they could not support themselves emotionally. Those ideas, in most of the time comes from the very conservative families, where they think, all the members should grow up closely where most of the time the
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 created the kids in a bubble.
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, considering the topic previously discussed, it is clear to state that youngster people need to develop some behaviours by themselves. In
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 case I really agree that the University's
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 is the best time to self-knowledge and discover a new world.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • independence
  • self-reliance
  • time management
  • organizational skills
  • diverse social environments
  • broader network
  • professional contacts
  • accommodation
  • financial burden
  • emotional support
  • psychological support
  • stress
  • anxiety
  • academic pressures
  • familial support system
  • distraction
  • focused study environment
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