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Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products any ware in the world. Is it a positive or negative development?

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Nowadays, due to massive
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 through international corporations has opened their branches in almost every country, the same products area available in everywhere and
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 has made people in every country look similar. In my opinion,
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 fact is not exactly a positive change.
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 with, it is certainly believed that the
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 of some product might add, a positive value to the consumers in local country as well as the global market.
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 of all, it enhances the business of the international markets, which presents the positive value to the consumers. Since, it often expands the customers options by offering international products.
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, it might increase the level of competition between local and international companies,
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, it
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also lead
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 to improve their quality as well as set up the reasonable price.
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, McDonald's is succeed to become standard in burger product, in Indonesia when somebody looking for some burger, they will compare with McDonald's items.
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, many people argue that
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 has negative impact on the local people and their traditions,
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, it might the certain local traditions will be ruined and disappear, in another term the local identities would be forgotten in the future.
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 in fashion area, a lot of the younger generations in Indonesia never know their traditional clothes like cekak musang clothes, they only about western clothes which they wear in their daily activity. To conclude, the
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 would have a positive impact when they able to blend with local identities as well as strengthens the local value.
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