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What are the advantages and disadvantages of young people doing volunteer work?

#people #volunteer #work
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Many students prefer to take a gap of
one
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 year before joining the university, once they finish the high school. During
this
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 year, they often move to any developing or underdeveloped country to do some charity
work
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. Students can learn some valuable
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 lessons and working ways while doing the
volunteer
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work but
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work, but
 there are some drawbacks to be taken into account.
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,
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 benefits of students doing
volunteer
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 task is that they learn some important
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 lessons, which are proven to be beneficial once they enter into the society for
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. To state an example, they understand the value of hard
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 in
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. While working for charity, they get to see many people working hard to earn the bread and butter.
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, they understand that hard
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 is necessary to succeed in
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.
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, doing
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work
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 is advantageous because it inculcates a sense of responsibility in students. They learn to be responsible for their needs and actions as during school every need of children is often taken care by their parents.
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, during
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 time, they get the chance to take their as well as other people's responsibility.
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 problem, when students do any
volunteer
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work
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 is that they might get interested in working and lose interest in studies.
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,
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 may never return to the college to complete the study, which is not beneficial for their future growth as completing a university education is an important parameter to measure success of a person. Another possible issue is children might get influenced by the culture of a foreign country where they
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 and may decide to settle there for the rest of the
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. In conclusion, while students can benefit from
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work
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, it can
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 lead to loss of interest in studies.
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