The tendency of news reports in the media to focus more on problems and emergencies rather than on positive developments is harmful to the individuals and the society as a whole. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In
this
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day and age, the aim of news and social media is to demonstrate the drawbacks and problems of the world to the society, which is said that negatively impacts on
thinking
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the thinking
of people. I partly agree with
this
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issue and I will support my opinion with examples. To a certain extent I agree that displaying
only bad news influence
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the only bad news influence
on individuals, but I
also
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think that they should see and be aware of these events. I agree to
this
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statement up to a point in
this
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essay I shall put forth my arguments to support my views.
Firstly
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, illustration of negative news and events make people feel anxiety, trouble and fear which leads to psychological disturbance of thinking of many people, especially children. A good example of
this
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is showing crime committing actions of people through the TV channels and social networking are
negatively
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negative
effect on people and make them panic, which are
also
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the result of insomnia or even
nightmare
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nightmares
a nightmare
. Another reason why I agree is an argument that it
lead
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leads
to be bored and upset by many identical fields of broadcasts, take
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, news about crime committing or nature catastrophes.
On the other hand
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, there is an argument that demonstrating these kind of problems or news have not only bad, but
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a positive
consequences
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consequence
. To be more precisely,
such
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illustrations help people be aware of most news, which can avoid miserable results.
Moreover
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, information seen by individuals may
also
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teach them to conscious the essence and target of news reports. To sum up, I personally believe that
also
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it has positive impacts, there are many drawbacks
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to
it.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • news reports
  • media focus
  • negative news
  • positive developments
  • stress and anxiety
  • skewed perception of reality
  • world view
  • desensitization
  • pessimistic outlook
  • general public
  • mental well-being
  • proactive problem-solving
  • holistic view
  • informed decision-making
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