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some teachers says international student exchange program would be beneficial for all teenage school students. do you think its adVAntage will outweigh the disadvantage.

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AT THE PRESENT TIME, THERE HAVE BEEN INCREASE IN DEMAND FOR THE SKILLED WORKERS IN THE FOREIGN COUNTRIES.
HENCE
, CERTAIN MENTORS ARGUE TO INSPIRE THE YOUTH TO TAKE PART IN FOREIGN LEARNERS EXCHANGE PROGRAM BECAUSE OF THIER BRIGHT FUTURE.
THIS
 ESSAY WOULD DO NOT THINK THAT PROS OF
THIS
 CAN OVERCOME THE CONS OF IT.
THIS
 ESSAY WILL DISCUSS HOW PERSONAL BENEFITS AFFECT THE NATIONA'S
ECONOMY
 AND CULTURE. THE
FIRST
 MAJOR IMPCAT IS LOSSING THE SKILLES AND TALENTED WORKERS IN THE HOME COUNTRY THAT COULD ASSIST TO BOOST THE TERITORY'S
ECONOMY
. WHEN, ONE INTERNATIONAL STUDENT GOES TO FOREIGN, HE MIGHT END UP STAYING THERE BECAUSE OF THE BETTER SALARY AND GROWTH CHANCES.
THIS
 DESIRE TAKE TAME AWAY FORM THEIR HOME NATION. AT THE END, NATION WOULD NOT HAVE ENOUGH TALENTED PROFESSIONALS AROUND THE COUNTRY. FO INSTANCE, ACCORDING TO THE FOREIGN NATIONAL DEPARTMENT OF THE INDIA, 70% OF THE PEOPLE ARE, IGRATING THORUGH THE EXCHANGE PROGRAMM
THIS
 HAS WEAKEN THE STRENGTH OF THE TERRITORY.
IN CONTRAST
, MIGRATED NATIONS
ALSO
 LOOES THEIR
ECONOMY
 DUE TO THE OPPOSITE IMPACT ON THE LOCAL PEOPLE.
MOREOVER
, THEY PERHAPS NOT ACCEPT THE FOREIGH NATIONALS AND STARTS VIOLATING ACTIONS TO PROTET THEMSELVES.
THIS
ALSO
 LEADS TO LOOS THE
ECONOMY
 OF THAT provincial. FPOR INSTANCE, AS PER THE USA CRIMINAL RECORDS, 60% OF THE LOCAL FOLKS, STARTED OPPOSING THE IMMIGRATIONS SYSTEMS AS THEY DO NOT HAVE ENOUGH POSITIONS TO OFFER. IN CONCLUSION, AFTER ABOVE DISCUSSION, BOTH THE NATIONS WOULD BE IN DESASTER DUE TO THE EXCHANGE PROGRAM FORM AN ECONOMIC VIEW.
NONETHELESS
, PERSONALLY, IT WOULD PROVIDE AN EXCELLENT OPPORTUNITY FOR THE INDIVIDUAL TO RISE AND SHINE AROUND THE GLOBE. BUT, IF
THIS
 [ROGRAM PROMOTES THE LEARNERS TO LEARN THE NEW SKILLS AND APPLY THEM IN THE HOME COUNTRY,
THEN
 IT WOULD DIMINISH THE DETRIMENTAL IMPLICATIOPN ON BOTH THE CONTINENTS.
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