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You recently did a short cookery course. The cookery school has asked for your feedback on this course. Write a letter to the course director at the cookery school. In your letter, describe what you enjoyed about the course say how much cooking you've done since the course suggest another cookery course you'd like the school to offer

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
 letter to inform you that it was a great experience when I completed the culinary arts skill course at our school and I learnt about various cuisines of different countries. To commence with, it was an excellent effort made by our hospitality department so that the students know about cooking skills. I enjoyed the course a lot because it was a new thing for me and an opportunity to become independent after learning the basic dishes.
Moreover
, I tried different cuisines in these four months,
For instance
, I am familiar with some Italian
as well as
 Indian dishes.
Furthermore
, the staff members have done a tremendous job of providing knowledge to the learners.
Therefore
, I request you to plan another cookery course in which students can gain knowledge particularly related to Indian cuisines. I am very thankful and forward to hearing from you. Yours Faithfully, Love
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coherence cohesion
Ensure you include a clear introduction that paraphrases the task's requirements.
coherence cohesion
Use a range of cohesive devices to enhance the logical flow of your ideas.
coherence cohesion
Formulate a clear conclusion that echoes the sentiments expressed in the letter.
task achievement
Develop each point fully to meet the task response criteria, giving specific examples of your experience and why you enjoyed the course.
task achievement
Match the tone of the letter to the target audience, which may involve adopting a more formal register.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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