Some school levers travel or work for a period of time instead of going to university. What are it’s advantages and disadvantages.

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Nowadays its becomes trend in students for solo

traveling

the act of going from one place to another

travelling

or working after school to

fulfill

put in effect

fulfil

their wishes and they extend their future

education

for that

this

mindset has both positive and negative repercussions on their

life

. Both the

notion

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notions

will describe well in essay with suitable rationales.

To begin

with after school

education

majority of people wants to live their

life

with

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their own way.

Firstly at

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Firstly, at

the newly adult

age all

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age, all

are

think

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thinking

they

are become

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were becoming

now independent to take

decision

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a decision

decisions

and start working to get more money for their expenditures which may incline them to some bad activities.

For

example many

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example, many

people start working in call

centers

an area that is approximately central within some larger region

centres

centre

which is

bit

Suggestion

a bit

easy to start and not require any degree in that most of the call

centers

an area that is approximately central within some larger region

centres

are working for some fraud work which affect the people negatively.

Secondly travel

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Secondly, travel

also

be in trend on

this

people

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person

like solo

traveling

the act of going from one place to another

travelling

tracking

journey on foot, especially in the mountains

trekking

and many more. At

this

age sometime

this

activity

become

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becomes

wrong in

some ones

a human being

someones

life

because of peer pressure of the trend they

do but

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do, but

all

this

thing are not their routine

life

and they

puts

Suggestion

put

in some trouble, for an instant some time they are stolen and fraud by people on that

are

a particular geographical region of indefinite boundary (usually serving some special purpose or distinguished by its people or culture or geography)

area

because of they not aware about it.

Lastly if

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Lastly, if

they

are incline

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are inclined

this

type of

activity

and many

case they

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cases, they

cases they

never start their university

education

and they become

little bit

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a little bit

illiterate in terms of

education

. On

contrary there

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the contrary, there

the contrary there

are some positive impact of

this

activity

on people, these types of stuffs make person more stable and responsible at

this

age of beginning to take responsibility of self and family

also

, they will train for

future

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the future

and easily accepts the problems of

them

of them or themselves

their

life

and out from them very politely without any

depurations

something used to beautify

decorations

This

will be only in case when

this

activity

done in proper way and proper manner and for

short

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the short

a short

of time

otherwise

it repercussion is very bad. After

discussion both

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discussion, both

the notion all

activity

are done

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is done

in limitation is good for

life

otherwise

its create many problems.

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