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Nowadays, there is a trend that reports of media focus on problems and emergencies rather than positive development. Some people think it is harmful to individuals and to society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In contemporary
society
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, the
media
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 has increasingly
prioritized
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 sensational stories of crises, disasters, and social problems over accounts of
progress
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 and positive developments.
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 some argue that
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 trend merely reflects reality, I strongly believe that the predominance of negative reporting is detrimental both to individuals and to
society
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 as a whole.
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 essay will examine the psychological consequences for audiences and the broader social implications before concluding that a more balanced approach is essential.
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, constant exposure to negative news can have profound psychological effects on individuals. Studies in
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 psychology suggest that repeated coverage of emergencies fosters anxiety, fear, and even
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 among viewers.
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, when natural disasters or political conflicts dominate headlines, audiences may develop a distorted perception that the world is overwhelmingly unsafe.
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 not only undermines mental well-being but
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 discourages optimism and personal motivation.
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, reports highlighting innovation, scientific breakthroughs, or acts of kindness can inspire hope and resilience, demonstrating that the
media
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’s choices directly shape public mood.
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, the societal consequences of
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 reporting are equally concerning. A relentless focus on problems can erode trust in institutions and fuel cynicism about collective
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. Citizens who are bombarded with stories of corruption or violence may disengage from civic participation, believing that their efforts are futile.
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, the absence of coverage on positive developments—
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 as advances in healthcare or successful community initiatives—means that
society
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 loses opportunities to learn from and replicate success. Balanced reporting,
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, is not merely a matter of fairness but a catalyst for social cohesion and constructive action. Admittedly, it can be argued that the
media
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 has a duty to inform the public about pressing issues, and emergencies often demand immediate attention.
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,
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 responsibility does not justify disproportionate emphasis on negativity. A responsible press should inform without overwhelming, offering a comprehensive picture that includes both challenges and achievements. By doing so, the
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 can
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 its role as a watchdog
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 simultaneously fostering hope and
progress
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. In conclusion,
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 the coverage of problems and emergencies is undeniably important, the current imbalance in
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 reporting is harmful to both individuals and
society
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. Excessive negativity distorts perceptions, damages mental health, and weakens social trust. I
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 firmly agree that the trend is detrimental, and I advocate for a more balanced
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 landscape that celebrates
progress
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 alongside addressing challenges. Only
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 can the press truly empower citizens and contribute to a healthier, more optimistic
society
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.

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task structure
State your view in the first paragraph and restate it in the end.
content
Give one clear example in each main idea to back up what you say.
style
Use short, plain sentences to keep flow and make ideas easy to see.
cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like also, but, therefore to show how ideas are linked.
task response
Check that you cover both sides but keep your own view clear in the end.
strength
Clear view and a well-planned structure.
strength
Good order of ideas and clear paragraphing.
strength
Use of a counter-argument and a strong close.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pessimistic outlook
  • exposed to negative news
  • stress and anxiety
  • success stories
  • balanced reporting
  • well-informed public
  • rational decisions
  • sense of helplessness
  • apathy
  • skew public perception
  • mistrust in institutions
  • enhance well-being
  • mental health
  • manipulate public opinion
  • serve specific agendas
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