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Nowadays people use social media to keep in touch with others and be aware of news Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages

#people #media #touch #news #outweigh
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In recent times, the
technology
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 has helped people
to communicate
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communicate
 with others through the means of social applications, and update them with recent events. In my opinion, the advantage of
technology
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outweigh
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outweighs
 the drawbacks. In the contemporary era, the advancement of
technology
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 has made it possible for individuals to interest with the people they know. It was not possible in the past as letter and
telephone
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the telephone
 were the only means to communicate. A letter may sometime take months to reach the receiver address and calls on mobile-phones were expensive that people in lower-income groups cannot afford. The development in Information
Technology
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 and the Internet has made it viable and economical.
For instance
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, social applications are pre-installed on the phone, which enables a person to interact with the other user registered on
social website
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social websites
the social website
. Some people argue that because of
this
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 advancement people are not interacting face-to-face;
however
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, it would be difficult for individuals who are a thousand miles away from each other.
Secondly
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, a person
may now has
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may now have
 access to different newspapers and magazines around the world, which may provide
informations
a message received and understood
information
 about current events.
This
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 is because of digital media and availability of electronic papers. It has benefitted largely to businessman and investors having keen interest in the international market.
For example
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, a stock broker, established in India, may purchase or sell a stock in the UK by accessing the current news of the country.
Furthermore
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, it has
also
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 benefited people who adulate celebrities and sports-person, as they may be updated about the sporting events. People may argue that digital newspaper cannot be accessed by people who are unaware of using latest technologies;
in contrast
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, the printed paper
are
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is
 still unavailable. In conclusion,
although
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 there are
few drawbacks
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a few drawbacks
 of
technology
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, the world has largely benefitted as it has made possible for people, around the world, to interact with each other regardless of their geographic locations.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Instant communication
  • Geographical separation
  • Vital sources
  • Global events
  • Networking opportunities
  • Interpersonal relationships
  • Digital interactions
  • Misinformation
  • Misiformed public opinions
  • Endanger
  • Excessive use
  • Addiction
  • Mental health
  • Anxiety
  • Depression
  • Loneliness
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