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Some people think it is more important to plant more tree in open areas in towns and cities than provide more housing. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, it is an increasing concern regard the greenery around the country.
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, whether trees should be planted more in cities rather than offering more accommodations, those remains a controversial issue. I agree, cities should have a more green area while cities have sufficient building.
Firstly
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, as adequate housing for locals to live, trees could cool down the cities and towns. With heater summer, many residents rely on air-conditioning to decline the indoor
warmth but
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warmth, but
 it
causes
put an end to a state or an activity
ceases
 to outdoor heat higher. Planting street trees can adjust outside temperature to stay a lower level, whereas, as a benefit, it will be cooler in people’s homes.
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, trees
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 as a function could absorb toxic substances in the air (CO2 or air-wasting emission form vehicle or manufactures). When people want to stay away from some health issues that are caused by environmental degradation, trees can definitely help. And
this
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 is something those housing buildings cannot contribute. Trees not only as a tool for maintaining
environment
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the environment
an environment
, but as a function to clean up the air and remain the temperature. Definitely, the housing are the most important elements for human survival, so that if the majority of residents have comfortable and sufficient accommodations, planting trees should be considered as a priority in these places. As long as housing is not an urgent problem,
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 greenery can be prioritised for open areas. In conclusion, both trees and housing play an important role in urban lifestyle. I firmly agree that the city should have a more green area while most city residents already have a home to live in.
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